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The bed-sheets by ~sammehsweet:iconsammehsweet:



I.

I wept between the bed-sheets
where we made love,
         we made war,
though both were fair.

I wept between the bed-sheets,
but the first wave is parked close
between the monoliths that
raise the carport,
so time is short.

I reinforce my battlements,
build pylons of pillows
don vestments and scents
of war:
            Of sugar and lace,
            No armor, no mace
            can unravel you
            like I do.

How I unravel you.



II.

I lay between the bed-sheets
Under the weight of your body.
the price of war,
            I lay stinking, soiled, sore
            between these bed-sheets.

My lace is torn,
My sugar scent
now the brine that shines
on skin, on cheeks carmine,
Divine! Could you be mine?

I lay awake. I wonder:
Do you tell stories
of conquests and glories
upon our battlefield?
I guess it’d be fair.



III.

I wait between the bed-sheets,
for the phone monotone alarm
before a light switch dawn.

My kingdom lies in ruins,
The underlay overturned
the pillows collapsed
into the doona, but, perhaps,
My worst:
The enemy sleeps in my camp.

I wish he was my hostage,
But I am the Prisoner
in my own lands.

Tomorrow, or today,
I will rebuild.
Tomorrow, or tonight
He will tear my walls down:
                We will make war,
                We will make love,
                both are fair.
©2007-2009 ~sammehsweet
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People ask me whether my poetry is written with people/events/emotions in mind. I don't think I ever write channelling that level of truth or factual basis into my work.

I do, however, channel emotions. These emotions generally produce things drastically different to what stimulated me. This is the case with this. I'm telling you this because this came out really different to how I intended it. I had ideas, small fragments, wandering through my mind since about Wednesday, but I couldn't quite get it out.
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I enjoyed it greatly. I love the structure you used; 'twas interesting.

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Yet each man kills the thing he loves
By each let this be heard,
Some do it with a bitter look,
Some with a flattering word,
The coward does it with a kiss,
The brave man with a sword!
-Oscar Wilde
Yea, I've been really experimenting with structure lately. This came out very different, both in form and themes than I had actually intended it.

I guess that's art for you. =P

Thank you for reading, and commenting :hug:

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'Journalism is just a Gun. It's only got one bullet in it, but if you aim it right it's all you need. Aim it right and you can blow a kneecap off the World.'
This definitely goes to my favorites. I love the structure (as it's something I can understand, unlike random words across the screen) and I particularly love your word choice.

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To become the overman, you must first go under.
ZOMG thank you for :+fav: :hug:

I was happy with the structure. At the moment it is based off intuition, but from my background where I used strict metre I find I cannot write without some form of struture and sense to my writing. I don't get random words without meaning either =P

(I'm also glad that I am not alone on that matter too!)

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'Journalism is just a Gun. It's only got one bullet in it, but if you aim it right it's all you need. Aim it right and you can blow a kneecap off the World.'
Now that we mention it, I'm also not a fan of words spread out across the screen with no sort of order. O:

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To become the overman, you must first go under.
Readers can definitely tell that you came from a metered, rhymed style. However, it sounds so beautiful. I read it aloud and it's just...awesome. Your diction is incredible as well. Great job!

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It grieves me that this is not a dirigible,
that the sea stows us as a song in the belly of a maestro...
Oliver de la Paz
Yay! You read poetry the same was as me! That is you read it out loud! I also read poetry out loud, because you get a better feel for the metre - which is half the poem, the other is language - and the music of the work so much more!! :hug:

Thank you so very very much, that was a very nice thing I enjoyed hearing very very much!! :w00t!:

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'Journalism is just a Gun. It's only got one bullet in it, but if you aim it right it's all you need. Aim it right and you can blow a kneecap off the World.'
Reading poetry out loud is definitely one of the best ways to read it. I mean, that's how it was read back in the olden days and they weren't half-bad with everything else.

:hug: Aww, we just love compliments! Giving and getting them. We're like a the Wonder Twins except with compliments. [/dork]

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It grieves me that this is not a dirigible,
that the sea stows us as a song in the belly of a maestro...
Oliver de la Paz
lawl!

I think the world would ph33r our alliance and compliments. We could control the world with oue iron fists of compliments! :lmao:

(That or we'll just both have happy lives in mutual complimenting, though I'm sure the first theory is equally plausible!)

--
'Journalism is just a Gun. It's only got one bullet in it, but if you aim it right it's all you need. Aim it right and you can blow a kneecap off the World.'

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